Peer Review - 1st Draft

First Draft Peer Feedback

The feedback we received on our first draft, found below, was overwhelmingly positive. 

Some of the features that received the most praise were the sound, particularly the music track and the voiceover, and the typography. Many people said it showed many common conventions of film noir such as the black and white and the typical street setting. There were a few criticisms, some that we will be able to improve and others that we won't as they would involve refilming parts. 

One that can be improved on is our transitions; this was something I picked up on previously and had aimed to fix anyway. As we used a grainy image over the top of the footage rather than a traditional, built in filter, it often flashed in parts where it wasn't meant to in between the fade to black transitions. 

Another thing which needs to be improved is the exposure on the money in the briefcase which I have discussed in this post. I aim to correct this the same way the shot of the face was corrected.

This is an example of an improvement that we will be unable to make. We noticed at the time of filming that the tape recorder said "V-Sensor" on, however as we were lucky to be able to obtain one at all we took no notice of this even though it was not era appropriate. Also, this person picked up on cars flashing past in the background of one shot, something none of us had ever picked up on. However, there is no way for us to fix this. As it was not something we or anyone else noticed we hope it doesn't greatly affect the film. 

Overall, the feedback was positive and we were glad to see people liked some of the small details we added. Although one person said that they were confused by the time period, feedback from others said that the film conformed to the era so we aren't worried and will seek to improve the parts that we can.