Audience Feedback on First Draft

After completing the first draft of our film opening we collected some audience feedback in order to improve. The audience had to look at the genre, conventions, sound, titles, editing and improvements. 

The first piece of feedback we received suggested that the transitions could be improved by being clearer. After receiving this we made an improvement to the transitions in our opening scene. However, they liked the titles, voiceover and cigarette scene. 

The next piece of feedback we received suggested that we should use a stereotypical location of an American street but this would be very complex to do without being in America. So instead we will stick to an alleyway and detectives office which are also stereotypical locations used in film noir. On the other hand, they liked our female voiceover, typography and match on action.

This feedback suggested that the time period was unclear and there were cars seen in the background. However, when we looked back at this the cars were very far off in the distance and could be seen driving past the entrance of the alley way therefore only a few flashes could be seen and they could have been cars from the 1950's.

 

Another piece of feedback we received helped us to improve our opening scene by making the lighting less bright in order make the money in the briefcase visible. But they liked our voiceover, titles and music. 



 

Overall, the feedback we received helped us to improve our opening scene. It was useful to see what people liked and to make sure the genre was clear. As we knew the storyline well it was also helpful to have people who had never seen it before to watch it in order to make sure the storyline was also clear.